Writing in the Sciences 1.6
Writing in the Sciences 1.6の授業は、今までの練習問題でしたいいですね、授業の構成がよく考えられているなって思いますオンライン授業もただ、動画の視聴をするだけのような授業もあれば相互にフィードバックあるものもあります練習問題やってみました(お題)Anti-inflammatory drugs may be protective for the occurrence of Alzheimer’s Disease.これをリライトします。(先生の修正)Anti-inflammatory drugs may protect against Alzheimer’s Disease.なるほど、protectiveのニュアンスをそのまま活かしてますね(お題)Clinical seizures have been estimated to occur in 0.5% to 2.3% of the neonatal population.(先生の修正)Clinical seizures occur in 0.5% to 2.3% of newborns.元々0.5% to 2.3%と幅があるからestimatedのニュアンスはそこに含まれていると大胆に削っているまた、the neonatal populationもnewbornsのファンシーな言い方だと変更(お題)Ultimately p53 guards not only against malignant transformation but also plays a role in developmental processes as diverse as aging, differentiation, and fertility.(先生の修正)Besides preventing cancer,p53 also plays roles in aging, differentiation, and fertility.not only, but alsoの構文、なるほどbesidesを使えば簡単に言いかえれますね(お題)Injuries to the brain and spinal cord have long been known to be among the most devastating and expensive of all injuries to treat medically. (先生の修正)Injuries to the brain and spinal cord are among the most devastating and expensive.(お題)An IQ test measures an individual’s abilities to perform functions that usually fall in the domains of verbal communication, reasoning, and performance on tasks that represent motor and spatial capabilities.(先生の修正)An IQ test measures an individual's verbal, reasoning, or motor and spatial capabilities.ずいぶん削っています!(お題)As we can see from Figure 2, if the return kinetic energy is less than 3.2 Up, there will be two electron trajectories associated with this kinetic energy.(先生の修正)Figure two shows that a return kinetic energy less than 3.2 U_p yields two electron trajectories.こんな感じでした