ieltsテストで書いた ライティング
IELTSテストで書いたライティング、再現してみたので載せてみよう。所々違うカモ。今後IELTS受ける人の参考になれば‥いいか、ね問題:Some people said that young people should follow the traditions. Other people believe that young people should be free to behave as individuals.Qmiの解答:In today's sociaty, the behavior of the youth has been a debatable issue. Some people assert that young generation should follow the traditional culture. But on the other hand, there are many people who strongly advocate that we should respect the will of the youth individuals.It is quite understandable that people from different backgrounds put different interpretations on the same issue. Those who favor the former opinion give their reasons as follow;To begin with, to protect the traditions is a vital for our society as a whole, and this obligation owns young generation. The youth means that they are physically and psychologically strong, by contrast, it is hard for the elderly to keep their traditons. Thus, younger people should follow the traditions.However, the other side of the coin voices its strong oppositon, saying that young people should behave freely as individuals.First of all, being free encourages young people to find new technology or breakthoughs and also stimulates their aspiration to know the new world. Secondly, in additon to that, when they are released old tratisons, then they would try to find their own ways and it enables them to establish the ability to tackle difficult situations as well. It is absolutely important matters for the youth to expand the scope of their knowledge. Both sides of the argument present certain truths. Personally, I agree with the latter view that young people ought to walk on their unique road. And consequently, it plays a principal role not only in young generation but also in a whole society.なんとなくいけてそうに見えるけど、、文法ミスあり、アカデミックワード(上級単語)も少ない、、あ、そうだ、もうひとつ、かなり痛いミス。何度も登場する「The Youth(ユース)」思いっきりスペルミスして「The Younth(ヤンス)」って書いちゃった・・「Youth(ユース)」に「Young(ヤング)」の要素が入っちゃってるし… (;´∀`)けどきっと、文字数超えたし、賛成意見・反対意見&自分の意見まで書いたから「6.0」は、取れるよね?あとは運を天に任せて・・・ Please‥。