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Some people prefer to spend their free time outdoors. Other people prefer to spend their leisure time indoors. Would you prefer to be outside, or would you prefer to be inside for leisure activities? Use specific reasons and examples to explain your choice.



I definitely prefer to spend my free time indoors. Some say that activities outdoors are full of satisfaction for them such as watching sports games, holding beach parties, and so on while others enjoy leisure at home. In my opinion, spending my time indoors is capable of relaxing me so much due to the following two reasons.



A lot of leisure at home is available to satisfy me so much. In other words, whatever I can be pleased is always ready for use such as my favorite books, brand-new movies on DVD, interesting TV game, and among others. Not only can I spend my free time enjoying my hobbies but also I never become exhausted at all. On the other hand, going out for recreations is always full of frustration such as congestions with people. Actually, vacation or free time makes it possible for people to refresh and work hard after rest time; therefore our free time shouldn't be consumed by these ways. This typically implies that it is comfortable for us to spend free time at home.



Another reason is that staying at home during free time is the most ecological method than going out for leisure. For instance, spending my free time outdoors obliges us to spend much money to enjoy many activities than staying at home. Under the current depression, it hardly can be said that these consumptions are a smart choice. In comparison with them, spending my free time can not only enable me to enjoy my favorite things at home but also save much money. No matter how much fun is available outside, my favorite things at home always makes me enjoyable sufficiently without spending much money. This is an indication that spending my time indoors is more efficient than spending free time outdoors.


Hence I prefer to spend my free time indoors. It is certain that a plenty of outdoor leisure makes it possible for me to experience what we usually cannot do. However, it is also a fact that satisfactions like that can be obtained inside. In terms of a requirement which we can work with our concentrations after vacations, our leisure time should be spent indoors.




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今回もたなかせんせいに添削して頂きました☆


今日は文の修正に15分かかりました。

以前は1時間近くかかっていたので、細かなミスが減るなど、自分のライティングスキルが上達した結果ではないかと思っています。


あとは30分の壁!

これからまたライティングします・・!