After a long flight we arrived back to Japan in early morning. I slept a little and went to my favorite place, the library at Nanzan University :). Actually, I wanted to share some pictures of Cambodia through Facebook, but I had to study because I didn't study at all in Cambodia. After that I went to the gym to enjoy dancing!
社外秘の情報は載せていないので、社名を出しています☆
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Subject: My company and main services
Dear Mr. XXX, (Make sure you use a comma after the salutation Dear Mr. XXX, if you use a comma in your closing, Yours sincerely,
I’m writing to introduce my company, Mitsubishi UFJ Financial Group (MUFG), and its main services. Mitsubishi UFJ Financial Group (MUFG) is one of the world’s largest and most diversified financial groups with total assets of JPY218.9 trillion as of March 2012. I work at Mitsubishi-Tokyo UFJ Bank, which is one of the groups. Our bank is four banks in origin; Mitsubishi Bank, Tokyo Bank, Sanwa Bank and Tokai Bank. The oldest bank is Sanwa Bank, which started in 1656. Japan is infamous for its own credit-fueled boom-and-bust of the 1990s. It’s called the “lost decade”: years of slow growth and rising debt. In 1996, Mitsubishi Bank merged with Tokyo Bank to escape the troubles. (No plural s in the word trouble.) In 2002, Sanwa Bank also merged with Tokai Bank because of the same reason, so UFJ Bank was established. Finally, in 2006, Mitsubishi-Tokyo Bank merged with UFJ Bank, now that Mitsubishi-Tokyo UFJ Bank had been was built. Our vision is to “Be the world’s most trusted financial group”. To comment on answer the vision, we work together to exceed the expectations of our customers, and provide reliable and constant support to our customers. We have 38,800 employees, 767 domestic branches, and 74 overseas branches. We are trying to expand and strengthe our global presence.
MUFG’s services include commercial banking, trust banking, securities, credit cards, consumer finance, asset management, leasing and many more fields of financial services. The group comprises five primary operating companies, including The Bank of Tokyo-Mitsubishi UFJ, Ltd., Mitsubishi UFJ Trust and Banking Corporation, Mitsubishi UFJ Morgan Stanley Securities Co., Ltd., Mitsubishi UFJ NICOS Co., Ltd. and Mitsubishi UFJ Lease & Finance Company Limited. Our main service is giving a the best solutions to our clients. Although I don’t know the best folution for your cmpany yet, I can honestly say, “whatever your needs”, I we have the way to resolve it, using the strategies of our group. That’s our main service.
I look forward to your reply and to meeting you in the near future. (I made this into a complete sentence.)
Yours sincerely,
Ayatra
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Bob's Comment
Aya…Another excellent writing assignment. I found very little wrong with your content and writing. I made a few minor corrections as well as suggestions. If you have any questions, please let me know. Notice I used the word infamous instead of famous; something well known/famous in a negative way is infamous.
I would say that your writing appears to be that of a native English person’s writing. Keep up the good (excellent) work.
Have a great Golden Week……Bob
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Subject: My company and main services
Dear Mr. XXX, (Make sure you use a comma after the salutation Dear Mr. XXX, if you use a comma in your closing, Yours sincerely,
I’m writing to introduce my company, Mitsubishi UFJ Financial Group (MUFG), and its main services. Mitsubishi UFJ Financial Group (MUFG) is one of the world’s largest and most diversified financial groups with total assets of JPY218.9 trillion as of March 2012. I work at Mitsubishi-Tokyo UFJ Bank, which is one of the groups. Our bank is four banks in origin; Mitsubishi Bank, Tokyo Bank, Sanwa Bank and Tokai Bank. The oldest bank is Sanwa Bank, which started in 1656. Japan is infamous for its own credit-fueled boom-and-bust of the 1990s. It’s called the “lost decade”: years of slow growth and rising debt. In 1996, Mitsubishi Bank merged with Tokyo Bank to escape the troubles. (No plural s in the word trouble.) In 2002, Sanwa Bank also merged with Tokai Bank because of the same reason, so UFJ Bank was established. Finally, in 2006, Mitsubishi-Tokyo Bank merged with UFJ Bank, now that Mitsubishi-Tokyo UFJ Bank had been was built. Our vision is to “Be the world’s most trusted financial group”. To comment on answer the vision, we work together to exceed the expectations of our customers, and provide reliable and constant support to our customers. We have 38,800 employees, 767 domestic branches, and 74 overseas branches. We are trying to expand and strengthe our global presence.
MUFG’s services include commercial banking, trust banking, securities, credit cards, consumer finance, asset management, leasing and many more fields of financial services. The group comprises five primary operating companies, including The Bank of Tokyo-Mitsubishi UFJ, Ltd., Mitsubishi UFJ Trust and Banking Corporation, Mitsubishi UFJ Morgan Stanley Securities Co., Ltd., Mitsubishi UFJ NICOS Co., Ltd. and Mitsubishi UFJ Lease & Finance Company Limited. Our main service is giving a the best solutions to our clients. Although I don’t know the best folution for your cmpany yet, I can honestly say, “whatever your needs”, I we have the way to resolve it, using the strategies of our group. That’s our main service.
I look forward to your reply and to meeting you in the near future. (I made this into a complete sentence.)
Yours sincerely,
Ayatra
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Bob's Comment
Aya…Another excellent writing assignment. I found very little wrong with your content and writing. I made a few minor corrections as well as suggestions. If you have any questions, please let me know. Notice I used the word infamous instead of famous; something well known/famous in a negative way is infamous.
I would say that your writing appears to be that of a native English person’s writing. Keep up the good (excellent) work.
Have a great Golden Week……Bob
http://www.japantoday.com/category/national/view/japan-celebrates-youth-with-carp-streamers?utm_campaign=jt_newsletter&utm_medium=email&utm_source=jt_newsletter_2013-05-05_AM
TOKYO —
Colorful carp-shaped streamers flutter all over Japan as an increasingly elderly nation readies to pray for the health of young sons and mark Children’s Day.
The large fish flags, which inflate with the breeze like a windsock, are hung in towns and villages all over the country, with many strung across rivers.
Tango no Sekku (Boys’ Festival) coincides with Children’s Day, a national holiday that this year falls on Sunday, but which will give Japan’s salarymen a day off on Monday as part of the Golden Week holiday period.
It comes around two months after Girls’ Festival, when families decorate their homes with ornate dolls to pray for the well-being of daughters.
In Sagamihara, a city west of Tokyo, some 1,200 “koi nobori” streamers flapped across the river, an organiser told AFP, adding they were hoping to see around 400,000 visitors over a week.
The Boys’ Festival is believed to have started in the Edo era, which spanned from the early 17th to the mid-19th century, when commoners began flying carp-shaped streamers after the birth of a son.
The carp—“koi” in Japanese—is a symbol of health, prosperity and success, reflecting the fish’s ability to leap small waterfalls as it swims upstream.
Other customs remain to mark the festival, including decorating the house with a doll in samurai armour and bathing children in a hot tub with iris leaves.
People aged 65 or over make up around a quarter of Japan’s approximately 128 million population. The elderly are expected to account for 40% of the population in 2060.
© 2013 AFP
TOKYO —
Colorful carp-shaped streamers flutter all over Japan as an increasingly elderly nation readies to pray for the health of young sons and mark Children’s Day.
The large fish flags, which inflate with the breeze like a windsock, are hung in towns and villages all over the country, with many strung across rivers.
Tango no Sekku (Boys’ Festival) coincides with Children’s Day, a national holiday that this year falls on Sunday, but which will give Japan’s salarymen a day off on Monday as part of the Golden Week holiday period.
It comes around two months after Girls’ Festival, when families decorate their homes with ornate dolls to pray for the well-being of daughters.
In Sagamihara, a city west of Tokyo, some 1,200 “koi nobori” streamers flapped across the river, an organiser told AFP, adding they were hoping to see around 400,000 visitors over a week.
The Boys’ Festival is believed to have started in the Edo era, which spanned from the early 17th to the mid-19th century, when commoners began flying carp-shaped streamers after the birth of a son.
The carp—“koi” in Japanese—is a symbol of health, prosperity and success, reflecting the fish’s ability to leap small waterfalls as it swims upstream.
Other customs remain to mark the festival, including decorating the house with a doll in samurai armour and bathing children in a hot tub with iris leaves.
People aged 65 or over make up around a quarter of Japan’s approximately 128 million population. The elderly are expected to account for 40% of the population in 2060.
© 2013 AFP
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Here are two emails. One email was written by a hotel guest. The second email was written by hotel staff. The emails are original. I only changed the names of the people and places to protect their privacy. What’s wrong with the hotel’s message?
HOTEL GUEST EMAIL From:
Steve xxxx Hi, I stayed in your great hotel Saturday night. I seemed to have left my cell phone in room 743. Did you find it?? If so, can it be mailed to me in Daejeon? Thanks _HOTEL REPLY_ Hello~ This is Bluebird hotel^^ Thanks for using our hotel. We found you’re cell phone, but we could not find. I’m so sorry. Have a nice day.
EMAIL ANALYSIS Did you find the mistakes in the hotel email? There are lots of them. Below are 10 rules for writing a business email. Read the rules. Then re-read the hotel’s email message. How many mistakes can you find now? 10 RULES FOR WRITING BUSINESS E-MAILS
1. Remember _PAS_. Purpose, action, salutation. The beginning should say the purpose; why you are writing. Next, the email should have clear action: are you giving information or asking for something? Finally, close the email with a salutation, a polite way to say goodbye.
2. Be informal, but not too friendly. ‘Hello’, or ‘Hi’ are okay. Sometimes, people write emails that begin with a name, like “Steve”. Contractions are okay (e.g. I’d, he’d, we’ve). Never use emoticons.
3. Be concise. Business e-mails are short. No repetition. Usually, 2 paragraphs are enough – few people read long emails.
4. Use a descriptive subject line. Tell readers why they should open your email.
5. Remember the mechanics: good grammar, word choice, punctuation and spelling.
6. Scan. People scan emails. If it is interesting, they might read it carefully. Many people receive 25 to 100 emails a day. They don’t have time to read every email. Short sentences and short paragraphs are good.
7. Reference. If your email is a reply, say that. Something like this: “In your last email you asked …..” is okay.
8. Attachment. If your message has an attachment, add one sentence to say that.
9. Layout. Use white space. Usually, 2 lines per paragraph. This makes the message easy to scan and read. 10. Write with active sentences. Passive sentences use more words and take longer to read. REWRITE THE EMAIL I asked my students to rewrite the hotel email based on the
10 rules. Here is what one student wrote.
Steve: This is Bluebird Hotel. We received your email about a lost phone. We asked our cleaning staff to check the room. Unfortunately, the housekeepers were unable to find your phone. If we find your cell phone at a later date, we will contact you immediately. Best of luck to you. Sincerely, The Bluebird Hotel ************************************************************************
Here are two emails. One email was written by a hotel guest. The second email was written by hotel staff. The emails are original. I only changed the names of the people and places to protect their privacy. What’s wrong with the hotel’s message?
HOTEL GUEST EMAIL From:
Steve xxxx Hi, I stayed in your great hotel Saturday night. I seemed to have left my cell phone in room 743. Did you find it?? If so, can it be mailed to me in Daejeon? Thanks _HOTEL REPLY_ Hello~ This is Bluebird hotel^^ Thanks for using our hotel. We found you’re cell phone, but we could not find. I’m so sorry. Have a nice day.
EMAIL ANALYSIS Did you find the mistakes in the hotel email? There are lots of them. Below are 10 rules for writing a business email. Read the rules. Then re-read the hotel’s email message. How many mistakes can you find now? 10 RULES FOR WRITING BUSINESS E-MAILS
1. Remember _PAS_. Purpose, action, salutation. The beginning should say the purpose; why you are writing. Next, the email should have clear action: are you giving information or asking for something? Finally, close the email with a salutation, a polite way to say goodbye.
2. Be informal, but not too friendly. ‘Hello’, or ‘Hi’ are okay. Sometimes, people write emails that begin with a name, like “Steve”. Contractions are okay (e.g. I’d, he’d, we’ve). Never use emoticons.
3. Be concise. Business e-mails are short. No repetition. Usually, 2 paragraphs are enough – few people read long emails.
4. Use a descriptive subject line. Tell readers why they should open your email.
5. Remember the mechanics: good grammar, word choice, punctuation and spelling.
6. Scan. People scan emails. If it is interesting, they might read it carefully. Many people receive 25 to 100 emails a day. They don’t have time to read every email. Short sentences and short paragraphs are good.
7. Reference. If your email is a reply, say that. Something like this: “In your last email you asked …..” is okay.
8. Attachment. If your message has an attachment, add one sentence to say that.
9. Layout. Use white space. Usually, 2 lines per paragraph. This makes the message easy to scan and read. 10. Write with active sentences. Passive sentences use more words and take longer to read. REWRITE THE EMAIL I asked my students to rewrite the hotel email based on the
10 rules. Here is what one student wrote.
Steve: This is Bluebird Hotel. We received your email about a lost phone. We asked our cleaning staff to check the room. Unfortunately, the housekeepers were unable to find your phone. If we find your cell phone at a later date, we will contact you immediately. Best of luck to you. Sincerely, The Bluebird Hotel ************************************************************************
I'm writing some helpful information on how to properly write and send a business email. I hope these two different articles on emails will help you greatly as you continue your email writing assignments.
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HOW DO I COMPOSE AN EMAIL TO SOMEONE I DON'T KNOW?
There are a few important points to remember when composing email, particularly when the email's recipient is a superior and/or someone who does not know you.
* Be sure to include a meaningful subject line; this helps clarify what your message is about and may also help the recipient prioritize reading your email
* Just like a written letter, be sure to open your email with a greeting like Dear Dr. Jones, or Ms. Smith:
* Use standard spelling, punctuation, and capitalization. THERE'S NOTHING WORSE THAN AN EMAIL SCREAMING A MESSAGE IN ALL CAPS.
* Write clear, short paragraphs and be direct and to the point; professionals and academics alike see their email accounts as business. Don't write unnecessarily long emails or otherwise waste the recipient's time
* Be friendly and cordial, but don't try to joke around (jokes and witty remarks may be inappropriate and, more commonly, may not come off appropriately in email)
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HOW DO I COMPOSE AN EMAIL TO SOMEONE I DON'T KNOW?
There are a few important points to remember when composing email, particularly when the email's recipient is a superior and/or someone who does not know you.
* Be sure to include a meaningful subject line; this helps clarify what your message is about and may also help the recipient prioritize reading your email
* Just like a written letter, be sure to open your email with a greeting like Dear Dr. Jones, or Ms. Smith:
* Use standard spelling, punctuation, and capitalization. THERE'S NOTHING WORSE THAN AN EMAIL SCREAMING A MESSAGE IN ALL CAPS.
* Write clear, short paragraphs and be direct and to the point; professionals and academics alike see their email accounts as business. Don't write unnecessarily long emails or otherwise waste the recipient's time
* Be friendly and cordial, but don't try to joke around (jokes and witty remarks may be inappropriate and, more commonly, may not come off appropriately in email)
We went to the Old Market and bought many souvenirs because they were very cheap! After that we went back to the hotel and had a message. If you have a massage in Japan, it will be very expensive. But in Cambodia, you can have one for a low price.
In the early morning we went to Angkor Watt to see the sunrise. Unfortunately we couldn't see itbecause there were a lot of clouds. But we did see a wonderful morning glow. After that we visited Bontei Strai which is one of the most historic remains of Hinduism. There were many beautiful reliefs (what are reliefs???) of Gods.
At noon we went to Angkor Wat again to see everything. It was really great, but there were many scars (don't need the before scars) of war. I knew the history of this country and its many wars and many changes in government and literature.
At noon we went to Angkor Wat again to see everything. It was really great, but there were many scars (don't need the before scars) of war. I knew the history of this country and its many wars and many changes in government and literature.
Mom, dad and I reached Ho-chi-minh Airport, Vietnam! It took many hour to come here, so we were a little tired. We then went for a massage. After that we went to Siem Reap, Cambodia which is our final destination The airport and the hotel we'll stay at seemed to be pretty good. We were excited about the next day so we slept soundly soon.
I had dinner with a man who was a assmate of mine in high school. He likes climbing mountains and wants to climb mountains all over the word. His story was exciting. I like peopl who are enthusiastic about something other than work. It's great to talk with this kind of person.